Class today: October 5th

After looking over attempt #1, some common needs that we need to address in attempt #2 are:

• Telling a story that frames the writer in the best light. Remember the purpose of the essay is college admittance. The story you choose needs to have a calculated purpose. 
• Building off this purpose, you must have a THESIS. A POINT. Everything must work to support this idea. 
• Concise... snapshot.. Look at a small component and describe it thoroughly. The impact is more significant. 
• Write an outline! Write an outline! WRITE AN OUTLINE... FIRST. 
• Diction and syntax choices

Before attempt #2, we will be examining SYNTAX.

You will need to REVIEW and TAKE THOROUGH notes on the Syntax PowerPower Point.
You will have a quiz on Friday. FRIDAY.

Your outline and first draft of attempt #2 will be due on WEDNESDAY/THURSDAY.

Attempt #2